Geltab
Auteur de Crystals of Consequence
Œuvres de Geltab
The Arrival of Rez Diamond 2 exemplaires
The Last Droid 2 exemplaires
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Durel, a magi, rescues a small white dog from death only to have Death take the dog’s life years later. Durel has sworn revenge and used all of his magic to get revenge. The ending seemed rushed.
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- Œuvres
- 8
- Membres
- 19
- Popularité
- #609,294
- Évaluation
- 1.7
- Critiques
- 2
I got 33% into it before stopping, and being that that's 27 out of only 85 Kindle "locations," it shows it took a lot to not simply finish the story.
My main issue with reading this story is that the author doesn't seem to know the difference between a comma and a period. There are many commas used in the third that I've read. A large amount should have been periods. Some, if used as periods, would have created many fragmented sentences. The story was very chopping and really didn't begin to grab me.
Probably one of my harsher reviews, but this one really needs to get a second set of eyes on it. There might be a better story in here, in the end, but I can't get through it enough to find out.… (plus d'informations)