D. L. Harrison

D. L. Harrison’s A.I. Ship Cassiopeia has an intriguing premise that it fails to develop adequately. A sentient starship has lost its crew and must replace it with a human crew. How will they bond with the ship and help it fulfill its mission? The character of the ship works, but none of the human beings come to life. World-building is ho-hum. Harrison’s writing style is dreadful. This book would never pass muster with a competent agent or publisher. Indie writers like Harrison should grit their teeth and hire the services of a good editor–if they can find one at an affordable price. 3 stars.… (plus d'informations)

I had to stop

If you write about horses, make sure you know how to correctly spell the words you use. ‘Reins’ control a horse; ‘reigns’ is what a king or queen does.

This was on top of wish-fulfillment powers and a medieval fantasy world that has toothbrushes at their general store. She can basically do *anything* so long as she really wants to do it.
She doesn’t want to kill, then when she sees goblins being evil...she melts their brains. Oh, but she gets sick later so it’s okay.

All of the details in the story were poorly imagined or explained.

Editing errors were cropping up. Spelling words correctly, especially homonyms, is not optional.

I do not recommend this novel.… (plus d'informations)

Interesting but weak

I liked it, but I can see the flaws.

There was a lack of dramatic tension. Not necessarily in the plot, but in the writing. Everything was a bit matter of fact; nothing read like peril or action. I remember a trad pub author saying that shorter sentences make action sequences more active, so I think it may be a mechanics of writing issue.

A few copy editing or proofreading issues that could use some attention.

I will buy the next book, because I think the ideas are interesting, but I don’t feel I can whole heartedly recommend this to others.… (plus d'informations)

No challenge

No danger. The enemy never stood a chance.

At a certain point, the MC and his team are so over powered...millions of warships in less than a month and a half?!?!?...it becomes ridiculous. Limitless power, matter/energy transmutation, nanotech...the magic that supposedly exists never really appeared in this book. It is functionally useless.

Then there is the sloppy writing. Typos litter the book, with homophones on every other page.

The first book had some promise. This one broke the promise.… (plus d'informations)