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Chargement... After the Scrumpar Dahlia Donovan
   Aucun Actuellement, il n'y a pas de discussions au sujet de ce livre.   ) Connorz | Jan 4, 2023 |  First the cover. It’s a nice cover although I don’t think it depicts either of the two characters. I’m guessing the model face we see is Francis? It also doesn’t convey the type of story this is. The blurb gives the basic plot. Some added background is that Cad decides to open a pub named after his brother. He moves to a small seaside town with his nephew, where he meets Francis, who is going to decorate the pub. The rest of the story is their growing relationship and events that happen to them. I have to say the plot and writing style were a mess, and I’ll give my reasons why. For about the first third of the story it seemed okay and I didn’t really notice the problems with the writing, but it was like a light clicked on and after that, I really noticed. I almost didn’t finish the story, but since it was a fast read I decided to plow through it. Here are the problems I found in the book. 1) This story has a tremendous amount of monologue with very little dialogue. 2) There is a lot of inner monologue, with the characters telling us what they think, felt, and the description of places around them. It was like being told what was happening with facts. The writing style didn’t draw me in, or make me feel, or use any of the senses. It made the story feel flat, and I couldn’t identify with the characters. 3) The pov was wildly inconsistent. It would shift from a character’s pov to omniscient, and then a narrator’s pov all within one page, and sometimes less. 4) The author seemed to think that using some form of physical violence or hurting people was funny. There was pulling of ears when a wife was mad at her husband. Cad would flick his fingers against Francis in what he thought was fun even though Francis didn’t like it. Cad would also kick Francis in the rear, in what he though was a joke. Francis had a traumatic experience of a homophobic attack. He suffered from anxiety. There’s no way physical hits of any kind would be a good idea to someone who has been hurt like that. Clearly the author thought hits, punches, tickling, falls, etc. were funny. I found it disturbing that the author wrote and presented in a book that hitting and kicking and using some sort of physical hurt was amusing to get laughs. 5) I got the sense that the author would think of a conflict, add it to the story, then have it miraculously solved in a paragraph or two. There weren’t scenes to solve the problem, just a ‘this happened, that happened, and everything is okay.’ 6) Smooth segues between scenes were non-existent. The plot read more like the author plopped ideas onto paper then moved onto the next one without fleshing the scenes out, or smoothing over the inconsistencies. Because there were a lot of inconsistencies. It was almost like there were no beta readers or editor. 7) Caddock opened a bar, but there was no reference of him ever taking business courses on how to run a business or a pub. He just up and thought, ‘I’m going to open a pub, so I’ll buy one.’ And he is never seen in the story ever working at the pub to get it ready. Francis does the decorating, Caddock runs around doing nothing other than chasing after Francis and Devin. There’s mention of Cad hiring people near the end, but he doesn’t do anything except sign papers. This by itself is a massive hole in the story. 8) There were a lot of people whose opinions about a subject would flip back and forth within a page after they vehemently stated how they opposed something. 9) There were lots of mention of how Caddock couldn’t keep his hands off Francis. They’d barely known each other and when they went to an outdoor antique fair, Caddock is sexually playing with Francis in the open where others can see. And this is after Caddock didn’t want to let the paparazzi know about his private life. That’s another inconsistency the author wrote. The story is full of incidences like this. 10) One annoying and obvious inconsistency was the fact that Francis didn't drink because of the traumatic event. At first Cad is okay, but during the special night at the hotel he gives Francis champagne and he takes it like it's no big deal. Then when at Francis' friend's house he's offered a drink and refuses again. There's no character consistency. One moment he's upset about alcohol, the next he's not, then he is again. It's like whiplash. 11) Time jumps were bizarre. Scenes seemed to jump forward, then back. Time seemed non-existent nor relevant to how time functions in real life. Things I liked: 1) Devin, the little nephew, was cute. Overall, there were a lot of problems with this book. It was like the story wasn’t betaed, proofed, or edited because it had so many inconsistencies and erratic pov changes. Just thinking back about this story has me frustrated. I have more of this author’s books downloaded on my ereader when the books were offered for free, but I don’t think I’ll be reading them if this is the author’s style of writing, it’s just not worth my time to read something like this again. I give, After the Scrum, 2 Stars only because I finished it. The blurb was promising, but the writing style was a major disappointment. I would not recommend this book to anyone. Also, here is another reader's review that pretty much states all the issues I had with the story: https://www.goodreads.com/review/show/1654650674?book_show_action=true  ) Penumbra1 | Oct 11, 2022 | aucune critique | ajouter une critique
Caddock '??The Brute'?? Stanford lost his brother and rugby career within the same year. The once man-about-town is now a has-been and guardian to his young nephew. Not sure where life will go after the scrum, he decides to purchase a pub in the Cornwall village of Looe. He never expects to fall in lust'??and then love. Francis Keen hides his crippling anxiety behind his eccentric habits, lush interior design, and beloved dog, Sherlock. Alone by choice after an attack in college left him emotionally scarred, he lives by the sea with his gran, resigned to working small jobs for local businesses. Revamping the pub for the new owner is right up his alley - especially when he realizes who the owner is.Two men, so different, on track for a romantic collision. Can they survive the impact? Aucune description trouvée dans une bibliothèque |
Auteur LibraryThingDahlia Donovan est un auteur LibraryThing, c'est-à-dire un auteur qui catalogue sa bibliothèque personnelle sur LibraryThing. Discussion en coursAucunCouvertures populaires 
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