R C Bridgestock

This originally appeared at The Irresponsible Reader.
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WHAT'S PERSECUTION ABOUT?
DI Charley Mann is looking into a murder—one of those killings that make you despair for anyone's humanity—and it's a complicated case—just establishing the identity of the victim is difficult. The motive for the killing is impossible to pin down. And there's a dearth of viable suspects.

But she and her team keep plugging away, making slow and steady progress—in a great touch of realism (as per usual for this series).

At the same time, she's overseeing the investigation into some break-ins at a local university. Someone is breaking into the rooms of single women and staring at them while they sleep. Campus security hasn't been paying attention to the reports until some police officers take a report seriously. The invader hasn't crossed the line into violence, but the police know it's only a matter of time.

There's no evidence to support it, but Charley's gut feeling is that these are connected. But even if she's right, it doesn't do her any good—she has no evidence to point to a suspect for either. There's a break out there for her team to catch, they just have to keep working at it.

I FINALLY PUT MY FINGER ON IT
This is the third book in the series that I've read, and I've talked about the problems I have with a lot of the dialogue. I'm not sure I've done the best job describing it, but I've tried. I think I finally put my finger on it, now.

There was something about a conversation in the first chapter that rang a bell with me, but it wasn't for another 10-20% that it came to me: these characters—crime scene officers, PCs, detectives of all ranks—they talk like they're in an HR training video.

If you've ever made it through a training video, you know what these people frequently talk like.

SO, WHAT DID I THINK ABOUT PERSECUTION?
This isn't important at all, but this is a bad title. It has nothing to do with anything in the book. Really, it doesn't matter, because most people are going to think of it as Charley Mann #3 or something like that. But, blech.

On to more substantive things—I don't have a lot of new things to say about this book. Actually, I have nothing new to say. Like its predecessors, I really liked the story, I think the characters are interesting, and the police procedural aspects of the novel (the crime, the investigation, the twists, the original victim's backstory, etc.) are exactly what I look for in a procedural—but the writing isn't quite there. If Bridgestock took a little more time with the writing and editing, I'd be a huge fan.

As is, this is an entertaining enough diversion—frustrating when it misses, satisfying when it hits.… (plus d'informations)

This originally appeared at The Irresponsible Reader.
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WHAT'S CONDEMNED ABOUT?
DI Charley Mann is called out to look at a probable arson at a house that's set for demolition. It takes no time to determine that, yeah, it was arson—but since the house was abandoned and set to be torn down, no one cares to invest the resources to investigate further—what's the point?

Charley was curious about the house—since before she grew up in the area, there were stories about the manor house. Many (especially area children) call it haunted. Who wouldn't be curious?

Then the demolition company finds two bodies at different locations in what little of the building still standing just before they finish their job. And now it's time for Charley and her detectives to get to work. One body was tucked into a hidden compartment behind a fireplace, it'd been behind there for weeks—maybe a few months—and was the victim of a gunshot. The other body was hidden in the basement and seems to have been interred in the manner of a pagan ritual—possibly killed that way, too. That body has been in the basement for several decades, maybe a century.

Two homicides in one house. Two cases that couldn't be more different. This is going to take a lot of work, and a decent amount of luck for Charley and her team.

GRINDING SLOWLY
In Police Procedural novel after Police Procedural novel, inevitably one character will say something to another about how forensics don't get results as quickly as they do on TV. We all know this, anticipate this, and are ready for it. But, boy howdy, do things move slowly in West Yorkshire—they're probably more realistic than many of the other procedurals that make the same disclaimers.

The same things go for interagency communications—when Mann gets a call from some other law enforcement agency for information, etc. it's frequently long enough ago that I'd wondered if Bridgestock had just left that hanging, or decided to not pursue that line for whatever reason.

I absolutely believe that Bridgestock is more realistic in this than the majority of their contemporaries. How does anything get done? Sun Tzu had no idea about the pace of 21st Century bureaucracy when he wrote, "Wheels of justice gind slow but grind fine," but the man was prophetic. I just hope he's as accurate about that fine grinding...

TRUSTING THE READER
While I have been enjoying this series—there's been something nagging me about the writing (well, a few things, but let's just focus on one). RC Bridgestock doesn't trust their readers. After illustrating (or sometimes before) what a character is thinking or feeling, they state it. They explain a joke—or a pretty clear statement.

One example:

'He comes across as dodgier than a care salesman,' Annie said, ‘and car salesmen are well dodgy!’

‘Not all of them, Annie,’ Charley chuckled.

What reader isn't aware of the general view of car salesman as being unreliable, honesty-impaired, shifty—in short, dodgy? Who (in the conversation or reading it) needs Annie to elucidate that? Then to add Charly's disclaimer and chuckle? It's like the old 70s/80s shows that end with a punch line and then a freeze frame showing the entire cast laughing. Cut that section at "Annie said." Then you move on to the next scene—it's punchier, it displays the necessary information about the suspect and the requisite jaded cop humor (it's good to see Annie getting experienced enough to show that, by the way), and trusts the reader to know how people are going to react. It also cuts a little of Charley's sanctimoniousness, no one needs her to defend car salesman in that conversation.

Bridgestock does this kind of thing all over the place. It's not needed, it's off-putting, and it slows everything down. Especially with all the—very necessary—exposition in this book, the last thing you need is to let things drag.

SO, WHAT DID I THINK ABOUT CONDEMNED?
I've had a good time with the first two books in this series—I think I enjoyed this one a bit more than the predecessor. Charley's a good protagonist—dogged, determined, and flawed. Just what you need. A good leader, but not a perfect one. The rest of the cast of characters are just as promising, they're the kind you want to watch grow and develop and be fleshed out.

In this book, Bridgestock has given two of the detectives on Charley's team interesting backstories—and added to the backstory of one other. I don't know that they've done enough with them to justify the time spent—but there's promise for the future. I hope they deliver on that promise.

The mechanics of the writing still bother me—there's one chronological flub that I keep tripping on—but I find the cases, the storytelling, and the characters engaging and compelling enough to keep me going and I can gloss over 99% of the problems. The procedural aspects seem as sound as they can be. Two murders at the same location that are clearly unrelated? That's a great hook, and once you dive in you have to know how they're resolved.

I do recommend this—with a couple of qualifications—you're going to have a good time with it, and probably (like me) be ready to come back for more.… (plus d'informations)

This originally appeared at The Irresponsible Reader.
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WHAT'S PAYBACK ABOUT?
Newly minted DI, Charley Mann, returns to her hometown in Yorkshire. She grew up here, fell in (and out of) love here, and started her career in the police here. She clashed a bit with a superior, got promoted, and was sent to London for a few years to get some more experience.

Now she’s back and ready to get to work with the people and area she loves. As is the rule for newly transferred DIs/DSs in British procedurals, before she can even meet with her team or superior, she catches a murder case. I’d pay good money to read a book where someone transfers into a new assignment, settles into their office, gets to know people, and starts to wonder if anything ever happens in these parts before being hit with a major case (if only to see how an author could give us a couple of interesting chapters along those lines).

Back to Payback—this is a gruesome and odd murder. It’s not an easy crime scene to understand—there are too many things that are incongruous. Charley begins to suspect that’s intentional—a suspicion that grows after another body is discovered just as the investigation starts to stall. Things get really interesting from there.

SO, WHAT DID I THINK ABOUT PAYBACK?
I don’t have a lot to say about Payback, and that bothers me. Hopefully, Condemned sparks more thought.

I’m conflicted here, I’ll admit. Let me start by saying that I enjoyed this book, I’m looking forward to picking up the second one, and I think that I can recommend it (with some provisos) to you.

At the same time, there are some big problems with the book. The dialogue is typically wanting—frequently, it feels like they use 33% more words than they need to. Quippy bits, snappish retorts, etc. would land a lot better if they’d chop off a third of the lines. Trust your audience to get what you’re going for without the explanation. The narrative portions—especially those explaining Charley’s backstory or emotions—are less than good*. It’s the telling vs. showing thing, it’s a lot of being too wordy (see above), there’s some unexplained motivations—it’s hard to explain without spending more time than it’s worth. Lastly, the characters—with the exception of the killer—all need a little more sketching out. It’s the first in a series, so you can assume that’ll happen and I’m not going to complain about that (too much).

* That said, there were a couple of moments that shone—I just wish they weren’t buried amongst the “meh.”

That’s a lot to complain about there, so why did I say I enjoy it? The police procedural part of the book—thankfully, the bulk—saves this. The murders, the motive, the way that Charley leads the investigation, all the ups, downs, and curveballs—that was exactly what I came looking for in this book. Even some of the “Charley over-explains things” work because she’s trying to help a detective and a uniformed officer understand some things about the job. The moment when Charley starts putting everything together, connecting all the dots, and so on at the end? That was great. I can shrug off a lot of problems when the central plot is executed as well as this.

I realize a lot of people are going to disagree with me about some of my problems, and that’s okay, we’re all wrong sometimes. I do recommend this, I just think you need to go into it with the right expectations. I am looking forward to the next two books—I want to see if Bridgestock can build from this, how a story arc or two are developed, and if the one impending personnel change brings a better character than the one being replaced.… (plus d'informations)

Nine year old Daisy Hinds was last seen coming home from her grandmother's house after showing off her new bridesmaids dress. Somewhere in the last hundred yards, after she turned the corner to her street, she disappeared.

Deadly Focus is the first of a series introducing the reader to DI Jack Dylan. Dylan is a senior investigating officer tasked with hunting down Daisy's killer. As the book unwinds, Dylan is faced with another dead child. It starts to look like a child serial killer is on the loose and Dylan and his team are afraid there may be more victims in the future if they can't quickly find the killer. The plot seems like a familiar one but the way it's written we don't have any hints about who the killer is until Dylan makes the connection to the motive.

We are also introduced to his “too good to be true” girlfriend, Jen. She works at the police station and they are trying to keep their relationship under wraps. I found her to be the most unbelievable character in the book. She holds down a full time job, takes care of their home and their dog, and cooks fantastic meals for Dylan every time he comes home, no matter the time and without a harsh word, ever. Seems a little too Stepford Wife to me. I believe she was added because the writing team that makes up RC Bridgestock is comprised of Bob Bridgestock, a 30-year CID veteran and his wife Carol. Carol coauthors and writes the love scenes and personal relationships.

I don't know that I'm curious enough about these bland characters to pick up the next book in the series called Consequences. I didn't dislike the book. There's just nothing there to compel me to pick up the next one.
… (plus d'informations)